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[moveslikedate]

Obligatory HMD post! If you have anything you'd like to say about how I RP this guy, please feel free to bring it up here. All I ask if for gentleness in your concrit, as this is my first try at RPing him anywhere. |D

Comments

[tsunayoshi.livejournal.com]

Hi, I'm sorry if this seems sudden or unwarranted, but I just wanted to drop by and point out a couple things I've noticed with Date. I'm not super versed in SenBasa canon, but it seems like your Date seems far more eager to explain himself than I would expect. A lot of what he says reads like a background section of an application, but in the first person -- it's less Date to me, and more a constant stream of you telling your readers "just so you know, he fights with katanas" "just so you know, he's from Japan" "just so you know he's a Sengoku period warlord". Because of that, I just don't feel the same energy and MANRY SPIRIT from him.

I understand the feeling of wanting people to know your character so you can get the most out of tags, but I think it would help a lot if you stepped back and let the information come out through the character and how he behaves, rather than making him give out information on the fly, if that makes sense.

Again, I apologize if this seems sudden or "too soon" considering Date hasn't been in S_C for very long, but I just wanted to bring it to your attention before any big problems arise. Good luck!

[getyourgunson.livejournal.com]

Ooooh, thanks for pointing that out. I've never really noticed that, so thanks for pointing it out! I'm really not that all used to him so I'm really playing it a lot by ear and what my gut reaction is mostly. How do I put it, uh... I've... haven't really played a canon character for a long time already - not since I've dropped Teddie here back in January - I've been playing mainly in AUs and stuff so starting to play characters directly ganked from canon is kind of foregin to me again. I know its a lame reason, but yeah... uh I'm just not that used all over again OTL Please forgive this mun for her fail.

Thanks for pointing it out though! Looks like I'll have to run through watching the anime again just to make sure I have my riding driving right. >.o

[neverbeenworse.livejournal.com]

(fff hello, from the RP journal)

\O/ No need to apologize or anything, I'm coming off a long fandom RP hiatus too, so I totally know where you're coming from, not being used to things right now.

[getyourgunson.livejournal.com]

\o/ I will do my best to improve on this then! Thanks again for bringing it to my attention!