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Date Masamune [伊達 政宗] ([personal profile] moveslikedate) wrote2010-07-14 10:17 pm
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Obligatory HMD post! If you have anything you'd like to say about how I RP this guy, please feel free to bring it up here. All I ask if for gentleness in your concrit, as this is my first try at RPing him anywhere. |D
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[identity profile] tsunayoshi.livejournal.com 2010-07-27 12:30 am (UTC)(link)
Hi, I'm sorry if this seems sudden or unwarranted, but I just wanted to drop by and point out a couple things I've noticed with Date. I'm not super versed in SenBasa canon, but it seems like your Date seems far more eager to explain himself than I would expect. A lot of what he says reads like a background section of an application, but in the first person -- it's less Date to me, and more a constant stream of you telling your readers "just so you know, he fights with katanas" "just so you know, he's from Japan" "just so you know he's a Sengoku period warlord". Because of that, I just don't feel the same energy and MANRY SPIRIT from him.

I understand the feeling of wanting people to know your character so you can get the most out of tags, but I think it would help a lot if you stepped back and let the information come out through the character and how he behaves, rather than making him give out information on the fly, if that makes sense.

Again, I apologize if this seems sudden or "too soon" considering Date hasn't been in S_C for very long, but I just wanted to bring it to your attention before any big problems arise. Good luck!
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[personal profile] reverencing 2011-10-18 02:39 am (UTC)(link)
Feel free to screen this comment, since it isn't really about Date or your RPing, I just wanted it to be known somewhere and... I didn't feel like Plurking it since I'm taking a break from Plurk for a while.

I just wanted to let you know that I'm really proud of everything you've been doing lately, KB. I know it may not mean much coming from me but you've really been working hard these past few months and I find that really admirable. A lot has happened in less than a year and you've really managed to achieve a great deal, all things considered. You've been through a lot but you've managed to bounce back so well.

I know it might seem odd to say at this point but... I'm really glad you're still with us.
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